7.12.06

7:06 pm...

The sky is cold, stuffed with the hard baggage of winter. A beautiful moment.

4 comments:

About the Group said...

indeed a beautiful moment.

thanks,

scott

www.poetry-is.blogspot.com

sam of the ten thousand things said...

Good to hear from you Scott. Thanks for the read.

James Owens said...

I don't know if you meant this as a poem or as a passing notation of the moment (and I'll let the difficulty of distinguishing between the two possibilities echo in the background) --- regardless, it is a crystalline prose poem. Almost perfect.

"hard baggage" is evocative. Suggests going away, an elegiac mood under the cold sky that eventually freezes all things.

Should you lose "A beautiful moment"?

The moment is already self-sufficiently beautiful. I know this is a pat, workshop-y sort of comment, but....

sam of the ten thousand things said...

I hear you James. Thanks for the view.

Forest for trees... Just my mind at work, but I see it.